Posted By )3az )3aziah on 08 Oct 2011 07:33 AM
I have read and finished this book and find it like all other of NP's work a little lack lustre and filled with his own interpretation of the DEathlands and not established canon.
He makes way, way too much use of bio weapon animals and his own ad hock knowledge of the world, weapons and most importantly the main characters.
To me this book was nothing more than another pay cheque to him and something he churned out with scant regard to it being book 100 and as such a book that all long time readers have been waitting on.
I would give this book 2.5 / 10
I was thinking much the same thing. There are plot holes large enough to drive a truck through. I thought about it a bit and decided to write it all down. Feel free to discuss.
Plot Hole #1The situation: The companions ride up to Alton ville and offer a trade - their vehicle for horses and maybe some supplies. Ralhoun, the baron/chief, is interested at first, then suddenly clams up when Ryan mentions using the wag as a war wag. She then gives them directions to a camping site which is obviously an ambush point. Sure enough, the companions are ambushed that night, but since they see it coming, the Alton men are killed instead.
The problem: Why did Ralhoun suddenly turn on them? I can see her getting a little nervous about having a war wag, but she could easily rip it apart. It certainly doesn't justify sending a party out to kill them in their sleep. It even says that "Ryan knew why the deal had gone flat", but apparently he can't be bothered to explain it to the reader.
What I think: It makes some sort of sense if you assume that Ralhoun has heard rumors of the Stone Angels raiding villes. Some people have surely survived and fled, carrying news of Dean acting as an advance scout (of course, if that were the case, the Angels wouldn't have been as successful as they were...). Ryan mentioning a war wag might have tweaked Ralhoun onto hearing the description of the scout, who looks just like a smaller version of (you guessed it) Ryan himself. This doesn't explain, however, how Ryan knew what was going on - they hadn't met the Angels at this point.
And it also doesn't explain...
Plot Hole #2The situation: Ralhoun and her men have been chasing the companions for several days now; apparently they think Ryan's a member of the Stone Angels (more on this later). One night, Ralhoun (who's a doomie's daughter) has a dream. In it, she's trapped in a stone room lined with flayed human skins: one is her sec chief, who charged into the Angels' base and got them all killed/captured, and one is Ryan's (this becomes important later). She herself is tied down and is being raped by Camarillo, the Angels' leader.
After waking from the dream, she takes her sergeant out of sight of the camp and shoots him. In cold blood. Just because she thought it would avert the fate that she saw in her dream, even though she knows (it was explained to us) that her dreams are seldom accurate. A couple days later, she and her men raid the Angels' base, seeking to wipe out the Angels and the hated Ryan Cawdor (who, of course, isn't there). In the middle of the fight, two men from either side are broken out of their mortal combat by none other than Camarillo and Ralhoun, riding side-by-side. Ralhoun explains that they've "been tricked" and that Ryan's not an Angel. Camarillo suspects that Ryan and Dean are running a scam on them, setting the two groups against each other so the companions can clean up after the smoke clears. They then make a truce and set off after the companions.
The problem: Oh, where do I start... Pollotta has painted himself into a corner - he took half the book to detail the companions being chased by a howler instead of setting up a coherent plot, so by this point (about 90% of the way through the book) it's a total mess. Instead of rewriting it, he just shoehorns everything in and either expects the reader to ignore the gaping flaws, or he simply doesn't care.
Remember that dream Ralhoun had? The one that made her shoot her sergeant? Yeah, she apparently forgot all about that: she's joining forces with the guy who
killed most of her men and raped her. I guess she figured killing the sergeant was good enough...
And then we have the fact that the Angels are
raiders. You know, the "rape and pillage" kind of raiders, who have done this to over a dozen other villes? Again, Ralhoun completely ignores this little detail, despite running a ville of her own, because... she's blinded with hatred, or something. I don't know. There's not even an internal monologue about her planning to turn around and kill them after the battle, to prevent them from coming after her ville (because they're, you know, raiders and all).
And speaking of sec men... where did all these people come from? The way I figure it, the caravan would've been wiped out between the initial contact with the Angels, the battle in the power plant, and the final battle - there were only 11 wagons, and most of them were destroyed. Likewise, there seem to be hundreds of bandits and sec men each - Ralhoun apparently took every able-bodied man and woman she had, leaving her ville completely defenseless.
How did Ralhoun find the Angels' base? She was supposedly following the companions, but they never went anywhere near that place.
How exactly did Ralhoun find out that Ryan wasn't an Angel? Did she just walk up to Camarillo and say "Hey, I want Ryan Cawdor, and then we'll leave peacefully"? More to the point, why did she think he was one in the first place? If Ralhoun had heard rumors of the Angels, she would've instantly recognized Ryan and given him the old heave-ho immediately, instead of playing nice and then changing her mind. Though why she doesn't want them to go east is a total mystery; there's nothing there but that old aircraft carrier, and that's a hotspot (despite, you may note, the material in the reactor having broken down years ago).
On the same note, why did Camarillo believe her? He's the leader of a band of raiders, which breeds a good degree of paranoia. If someone attacked my ville with no warning, I'd assume it was either another raider band or a ville out for revenge; I certainly wouldn't believe the other leader if she told me she was after a single person.
The whole "they're out to play both sides against the middle" conspiracy theory isn't actually that bad... if it had been set up properly. The problem is, you're talking about a band of raiders and a ville (which is run by a non-paranoid baron). If I were Ralhoun, I'd start worrying that someone would take advantage of the ville's weakened defense (see above) and hurry back to Alton after I figured out that Ryan wasn't actually a bad guy (see below).
Ralhoun has no reason to go after Ryan - the companions killed her men out of self-defense, AND they left the war wag behind like they promised they would. Sounds like a fair deal to me - once I had someone check the wag out thoroughly for boobie traps (and finding none), I'd say "oopsie" and let the whole thing go, because Ryan was obviously not the person I thought he was. If she were an extreme paranoid, she could justify it; I would say she's not (given that her people love her and she runs a tight ville), but her actions seem to speak otherwise. Maybe she's got multiple personalities?